The opening paragraph is written needlessly cumbersome. Separate sentences are joined with 'and' in three places. At least the writers and editors should refer to class five grammar books before coming up with such crap.
RE:please learn to write lead/ intro properly
by Kannan SivaramanViswanatha on Jul 12, 2008 10:35 AM Permalink
Friend, Breaking up sentences in simple form has its own advantages but when the "thought- process" runs into a seamless communication of "punch" ideas, use of conjunctions is inevitable. You don't simply kill the thought, just to conform to orthodox rules of grammar. You mentioned 3 "ands" but actually the first and the last serve the purpose of combining (a) two nouns and (b)two results that follow in logical order. Nothing wrong with the author's writing style. The second "and" could not have been sacrificed in preference to simple composition because the main and subordinate clause are aptly in place. You have needlessly railed against a distinguished writer, just to raise a point. More important than strict observance of grammar is what I would term a " train of free flow of ideas".
RE:please learn to write lead/ intro properly
by Anointed One on Jul 13, 2008 12:29 AM Permalink
dear friend the writer's thought process simply did not need that stupid structure he chose to write. "The Indian American community and US business that had lobbied feverishly for the Indo-US civilian nuclear deal, are euphoric Prime Minister Manmohan Singh's decision to go ahead with the accord." could have served as a better start and niceties following in subsequent paragraphs. It makes is clearer, shorter and cogent.
