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RE:please learn to write lead/ intro properly
by Anointed One on Jul 13, 2008 12:29 AM

dear friend the writer's thought process simply did not need that stupid structure he chose to write.
"The Indian American community and US business that had lobbied feverishly for the Indo-US civilian nuclear deal, are euphoric Prime Minister Manmohan Singh's decision to go ahead with the accord."
could have served as a better start and niceties following in subsequent paragraphs. It makes is clearer, shorter and cogent.



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