the article is in old fashion, just bulleting the sales data / achievements will not serve the purpose. I think we must show our requirements by showing the inflation data, company's overall growth and comparing last year's increment and if possible showing some instances of getting higher increaments for non-performers and less increaments for performers. Also do not forget to start with thanks for previous year's cooperation (either in terms of increament or otherwise). At last (looking into the mood), you can say "SIR WE HAVE LISTEN AND WORKED FOR YOU FOR 364 DAYS AND SIR, I HAVE KEPT ONLY ONE DAY FOR ME I.E. THE DAY OF WRITTING APPRAISAL - SIR, YOU WILL HAVE TO WORK FOR ME".
